Guess it's my turn now to give my thoughts on this situation.
I think Rocket2 and UberTrainerMinusInfinity handled this poorly and are both in the wrong.
Rocket2,while I fully understand your frustrations and appreciate you standing up for me, it was too early for you to jump to the conclusion that Uber's a "
hopeless lost cause". Before jumping to such a conclusion, you should've tried getting more information as to why specifically he was never improving all this time, and tried coming up with a different strategy for helping him improve if what I've been doing all these months wasn't working.
For example, I was starting to think of maybe just having a documentation all of his custom card mistakes (
Using apostrophes ' when he meant to use quotation marks " and not capitalizing words he should always be capitalizing such as Deck/
Special Summoned/
Tribute/
Tributed,
etc) so they're all listed in one place and easy to find. That way, he could just go back and look at that compilation of his past mistakes to make sure he isn't repeating any of them with each new archetype of his, instead of having to search for and go back to a previous thread where I pointed out the mistake(s) in question, as said thread would just be lost on this forum where he wouldn't be able to find it, recall it, and remember it.
Also, KTeknis is right. What started as you criticizing immediately turned in you just making personal attacks:
after everything I saw, you suck
UberTrainerMinusInfinity can suck forever and that will put a smile to my face too
That crybaby of a wreck
Weak-minded kid
That infant is a manipulative ungrateful selfish little brat
:lol: We got another parhelia_000. What happened to your goodbye thread, crybaby. Ready to make a 2nd one.
Hey baby, now you are seeing this, I want to ask you directly
What is so appealing of being a mediocre?
Don't you feel like a coward in choosing to run away?
Why do you chose to write so much when you can't even read yet?
Who inflate your ego into believing you do not need to read any rules or retain any advises at all?
Were you aware that people like greg503 already know you are terrible at your job?
None of this is genuine criticism anymore. It's straight-up name-calling, taunting, and insults.
Why do you need to say he sucks when that term clearly has a very negative connotation to it? Why couldn't you just say he really needs to step it up, learn PSCT, and stop taking so long to do so?
Why do you need to bring up Parhelia? Why are you comparing those two to each other. Parhelia had completely separate issues. Parhelia's issue was mainly his customs being intentionally overpowered and him being too stubborn and unreceptive to much feedback, while Uber's issue was just his customs consistently lacking proper grammar / PSCT, and bullet points to read, as well as Uber relying a bit too much on others and their feedback instead of trying to learn from past feedback so he can be able to fix his customs' issues himself.
Why do you assume Uber finds it "
appealing" being mediocre and that he "
can't read"?
Why are you acting like greg503 is on your side when he made it clear here that he isn't?
Uber,Before I say how you were in the wrong, I will say: if you're truly leaving Duelingbook at this time, it was overall fun reviewing your archetypes. I wouldn't have reviewed that many of them if I wasn't getting at least some enjoyment out of it.
Also, know that it wasn't just me helping you this whole time. You were also helping me, probably just as much.
You see, a very important life skill needed, in order to review customs effectively and spot even small grammar / PSCT mistakes that other reviewers would likely overlook, is attention to detail. A very important life skill also needed, to correct such mistakes in the best way possible along with other balancing mistakes, is problem-solving. [url:1bh4n07w]https://www.hipeople.io/blog/8-common-traits-of-detail-oriented-people[/url:1bh4n07w]
[url:1bh4n07w]https://www.indeed.com/career-advice/career-development/attention-to-detail[/url:1bh4n07w]
[url:1bh4n07w]https://www.zippia.com/advice/attention-to-detail/[/url:1bh4n07w]
I've been developing and honing these skills since I was a kid, but REALLY honing them since I started reviewing customs back in 2020, and have continued honing these skills reviewing your cards, analyzing your texts word for word, and spotting the slightest error(s) to correct.
Earlier this year (March - July) I was working for a corporation full-time which was why I had to take that multi-month break from this forum that I took. In that corporation, I had to very often rely on my detail-orientation and analytical skills I had built from doing things just like this — analyzing customs for mistakes.
One of my main roles in the corporation was to go through hundreds, if not thousands, of data entries to make sure every entry was up to date and didn't have even a single spelling, grammar, or other mistake. Then I'd make a note of any such mistake(s) I did find to send to upper management for correction. Some of the notes I made were things like:
[list:1bh4n07w][*:1bh4n07w]This entry's serial number is listed as 1111122222333344444, however, it's missing an extra 3, so it should instead be 11111222223333344444 with five 3s instead of only four 3s, just like how the other numbers 1, 2, and 4 in this serial number are each written as 5 numbers.[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]This model number is listed as FS0VUTZELH, however, the third character in this model number — the character after the S — is a zero when it should instead be a capital letter O.[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]This identification number is listed as .1234567, however, there should not be a decimal / period at the beginning of it — it should instead just be 1234567 without that decimal / period.[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]This device should be removed from the database as it no longer exists — it was recently removed from service and is now scheduled to be scrapped / disposed.[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]This entry should be added to the database as it's for a recently installed device.[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]This device's location is listed as Building #3, Floor #6, Room #11, Cabinet #2, however, this is slightly incorrect, as the Cabinet #2 containing this device was recently moved to the 7th floor's 11th room of Building #3, so the location should be instead listed as Building #3, Floor #7, Room #11, Cabinet #2.[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]This device's location is listed as Building #5, Floor #1, Cabinet #3, however, Building #5 was recently shut down, so the location of this device needs to be reviewed and updated so the most recent building it was moved to is the one this device is listed in.[/*:m:1bh4n07w][/list:u:1bh4n07w]
It was specifically activities such as me casually reviewing your customs on this forum, with a keen eye for such detail, that helped me hone this detail-orientation skill that would later on help me perfectly fulfill my role at the corporation.
To this day, I still continue to hone and rely on that skill, when I do things such as update my résumé to correct minor spelling / grammar mistakes I had overlooked for months, and even now as I write this post, paying close attention to any spelling or grammar mistakes I can easily miss initially when writing such long posts.
So thank you for being a member of the custom card community for so long and giving me yet another fun way to develop and hone both that skill, as well as my communication skills when I had to communicate to you as clearly and concisely as I could how to fix each and every single one of those PSCT and custom card mistakes.
Also thank you for helping James improve his custom card making / reviewing skills as well, because when users like you share customs and I point out the mistakes, James sees what I look for and learns himself what mistakes to look out for when he makes / reviews customs himself, so he and other users also get a better idea of how to word cards.
That being said,
Rocket2, despite being hostile, unprofessional, and disrespectful in this thread, did raise a valid concern. It doesn't make much sense for you to be repeatedly making the exact same PSCT and grammar mistakes at this point that you've been making literally since I started reviewing your customs, unless you have a very good reason for that.
What could the situation be? Do you simply not have time to practice studying / remembering
PSCT and proper wording, and to learn from past PSCT / grammar mistakes so you could implement those changes on your own without relying on myself or James? Is your schedule in real life schedule too busy to allow you to do so? Is there something you have that's either physically or directly hindering your ability to do so? Do you struggle with finding the appropriate resources needed to learn and study these things? Do you need a different approach to this, such as taking notes of previous PSCT / grammar mistakes so you can easily and quickly go back to them so you can remember not to repeat them when making future archetypes?
Rocket2 seems to think this issue is all because you're "
manipulative" and whatnot, but if that's not the case, you should say so and make it clear what the case really is.
You also should not be publicly calling for anyone on this forum to get banned. If someone is doing something ban-worthy, you either message a moderator / admin privately about it or (preferably) report them using the Report Abuse page: [url:1bh4n07w]https://forum.duelingbook.com/posting.php?mode=post&f=7[/url:1bh4n07w]
Your comment here:
[url:1bh4n07w]https://forum.duelingbook.com/viewtopic.php?p=98170#p98170[/url:1bh4n07w]
Even if Rocket2 is dealt with by the moderators, it is quite clear that his threatening messages have ruined my public image on this site. As such, I am offically stepping down as a duelist to look for a new career. The message is quite clear....I am a child.
is also inaccurate. Rocket2's messages didn't specifically threaten harm against you. That would certainly result in a ban for him. Your image also isn't ruined. He may have... damaged it, but not ruined it...
and right now, you, and only you, know if you're a "
child" or not. Not myself, Rocket2, or anyone else in this thread. I'm sure Rocket2 only meant to suggest you were being
childish, not that you were actually a child. Like, you're really going to completely give up on this community, on custom cards in general, and on the platform as a whole just because of ONE guy in ONE thread? I can understand leaving if multiple people were ganging up on you and being toxic / hostile / hateful, or if there was no other easy way to deal with the harassment / abuse, but you don't have to take what he's saying this seriously at the moment.
There was also very little need for you
to PM me over a dozen times this past year asking for either a duel or some more custom card feedback, especially after I already told you I'd get to it when I found the time and energy.
Anyways, once again, if you're leaving, the least I can do is give you one last custom review, like a sort of parting gift.
Street Shark Big Slammu's effect can be shortened from:
Unaffected by your opponent's card effects during the Battle Phase. If a ''Shark'' or a ''Great White'' monster attacks a Defence Position monster, inflict piercing battle damage. When this is summoned, you can set 1 Spell/Trap card those card text mentions ''Shark'' or ''Great White'' from your hand/GY, also you can activate it this turn. After a ''Shark'' or ''Great White'' monster attacks, place a Shark Slam Counter on this card. Your opponent's monsters lose 100 ATK/DEF for each Shark Slam Counter on this card.to:
Unaffected by your opponent's effects during the Battle Phase. If a "Shark" or "Great White" monster attacks a Defense Position monster, inflict piercing battle damage. When this is Summoned: You can Set 1 Spell/Trap that has "Shark" or "Great White" in its text from your hand/GY, and if it is a Trap or Quick-Play Spell, it can be activated this turn. Each time a monster attacks, place 1 Shark Slam Counter on this card. Your opponent's monsters lose 100 ATK/DEF for each Shark Slam Counter on this card.[list:1bh4n07w][*:1bh4n07w]Effects no longer need to say "
by your opponent's card effects". They can now instead just say "
by your opponent's effects" without including the "
card"[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]You need to use the actual quotation mark by holding the SHIFT key on the keyboard then pressing the quotation mark key. You still keep using double apostrophes where you take an apostrophe ' and add it right next to another apostrophe ' to make it look like a quotation mark "[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]Defense is spelled with an S, not a C as in Defence[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]
Summon/
Summoned/
Summoning is always capitalized[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]You need to include a colon for on-summon trigger effects, so it should be "
When this card is Summoned: You can" not "
When this card is summoned, you can"[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]The proper way to word "
Spell/Trap card those card text mentions ''Shark'' or ''Great White'' from your hand/GY" is "
Spell/Trap that has "Shark" or "Great White" in its text from your hand/GY". Look at how
Geminize Lord Golknight refers to a card having Gemini monster in its text to get an idea of this. Also, you don't need to include "
card" when referring to just "
1 Spell/Trap"[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]An effect that sets a specific archetype of "
spell/trap" and allows it to be activated that same turn needs to specify that it only allows that for traps / quick-play spells. Look at the wordings of
The Dark Magicians and
Raidraptor - Wise Strix to get an idea of this[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]This next suggestion is a personal preference thing than an actual error, but I think it's fine for now if the counter placing effect triggers upon any attack declaration instead of just Shark and Great White monsters'. Also having the effect place the counter "
each time" the attack is declared instead of "
after" makes the effect less confusing, as "
after" could mean after the end of the damage step or after the initial attack declaration but once the damage step or something is entered[/*:m:1bh4n07w][/list:u:1bh4n07w]
Street Shark Jab's effect can be shortened from:
Unaffected by your opponent's card effects during the Battle Phase. Your ''Shark'' and ''Great White'' monsters cannot be destroyed during your turn. When this is summoned, if you have no monsters in your Extra Deck, you may target any number of ''Shark'' or ''Great White'' monsters in your GY: Special Summon them, also until the end of this turn, their original ATK becomes 1900. Whenever your opponent summons a monster with 2500 or more ATK while you control 2 or more Fish monsters, they must discard 1 card. If they cannot, all ''Shark'' and ''Great White'' monsters you control gain 1000 ATK/DEF.to:
Unaffected by your opponent's effects during the Battle Phase. "Shark" and "Great White" monsters you control cannot be destroyed during your turn. When this card is Summoned, if you have no cards in your Extra Deck: Target any number of "Shark" and/or "Great White" monsters in your GY; Special Summon them, but their original ATK become 1900 this turn. If your opponent Summons a monster(s) with 2500 or more ATK while you control 2 or more Fish monsters: They discard 1 card, and if they do not, all monsters you control gain 1000 ATK/DEF.[list:1bh4n07w][*:1bh4n07w]The second effect needs to apply only to monsters on the field. The current effect "
Your Shark and Great White monsters" will also apply to cards in private knowledge locations such as the hand and deck, so if an opponent's effect tries to destroy such cards in those locations, it would need to be able to[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]It needs to be either "
When this card is Summoned" or "
When this monster is Summoned," not just "
When this is summoned" without either "
card" or "
monster"[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]You don't need to say "
no monsters in your Extra Deck". You can instead say "
no cards in your Extra Deck" which is shorter, and since any card in your extra deck will be a monster by default anyways[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]Another personal preference change: The targeting effect should be mandatory instead of optional. It allows smarter opponents to take advantage of it by using some kind of response to it, promoting healthier interaction[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]Activation texts
are separated from effects by a semi-colon which looks like this
; not a regular colon which looks like this
:[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]You hold the SHIFT key, then press the colon key on your keyboard to get a colon. Pressing the colon key without first holding SHIFT gives you a semi-colon[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]"
also until the end of this turn, their original ATK becomes 1900" could just be "
but their original ATK become 1900 this turn"[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]Should include "
(s)" at the end of "
your opponent Summons a monster" so players know this applies once, and even when multiple monsters with 2500+ ATK are summoned at the same time such as via pendulum summon[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]Also think it would be perfectly fine for the 1000 ATK/DEF increase to apply to all your monsters instead of just the Shark and Great White ones[/*:m:1bh4n07w][/list:u:1bh4n07w]
Street Shark Ripster's effect can be shortened from:
Unaffected by your opponent's card effects during the Battle Phase. Your ''Shark'' and ''Great White'' monsters can attack regardless of effects on the field. When this is summoned, and at the start of each turn: Place a Leadership counter on this card. Your ''Shark'' and ''Great White'' monsters gain 100 ATK/DEF for each Leadership Counter on this card. If a Trap effect that would destroy a Fish monster you control is activated; (Quick Effect) You can remove 2 Leadership Counters from this card: Negate the activation.to:
Unaffected by your opponent's effects during the Battle Phase. Your "Shark" and "Great White" monsters can attack directly. When this card is Summoned, and during each Standby Phase: Place 1 Shark Slam Counter on this card. Your monsters gain 100 ATK/DEF for each Shark Slam Counter on this card. When a card or effect is activated that would destroy a card(s) (Quick Effect): You can remove 2 Shark Slam Counters from your field; negate the activation.[list:1bh4n07w][*:1bh4n07w]The term "
Regardless of effects on the field" is too confusing and would lead to ruling issues. Recommend changing that to another simple bonus like direct attacking or something[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]The next effect should be during each standby phase or something instead of the start of each turn[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]Not a good a idea for your archetype to use a different kind of counter that the previous card's Shark Slam Counter. Better to have this archetype stick with 1 kind of counter if it's gonna use counters[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]The last effect can be buffed to negate any effect that would destroy, not just trap effects; and it would fine for it to also remove the counter(s) from other cards you control instead of just itself[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]It's "
(Quick Effect):" not "
; (Quick Effect)"[/*:m:1bh4n07w][/list:u:1bh4n07w]
Street Shark Streex's effect can be simplified from:
Unaffected by your opponent's card effects during the Battle Phase. The effects of your ''Shark'' and ''Great White'' cards cannot be negated. When this is summoned: You can add 1 ''Shark'' or ''Great White'' card, or 1 card those card text mentions ''Shark'' or ''Great White'', from your deck to your hand, then if you added a level 4 or lower monster this way, you may discard 1 card, except the card you added this way: Special Summon that monster, but it cannot be used as material. You can only activate this effect once per turn. After this destroys a monster by battle: You may return any number of ''Shark'' or ''Great White'' monsters you control to your hand, then Special Summon them from the hand if able.to:
Unaffected by your opponent's effects during the Battle Phase. The card and effect activations and effects of your other cards cannot be negated. You can only use each of these effects of "Street Shark Streex" once per turn.
● When this card is Summoned: You can add 1 "Shark" or "Great White" card, or 1 card that has "Shark" or "Great White" in its text, from your Deck to your hand, then if you added a Level 4 or lower monster this way, you can discard 1 card except the added card, and if you do, Special Summon the added card, but it cannot be used as Fusion, Synchro, Xyz, or Link Material.
● If this card destroys a monster by battle: Target any number of "Shark" and/or "Great White" monsters you control; return them to the hand, then you can Special Summon "Shark" and/or "Great White" monsters from it up to the number that left the field.[list:1bh4n07w][*:1bh4n07w]I'm currently not sure if my suggested change to the second effect is the best way to word such an effect, but it's definitely better than the original wording where it isn't clear if it also protects its own effect, including that very protecting effect itself, from negation[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]Both the other activated effects should be hard once per turn, especially that last effect since it might otherwise lead to some obscure loop where you return it to the hand then re-summon it over and over, attacking again and again, unless that's what you want...[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]A hard once per turn clause needs to include the name of the card itself, so you say "
You can only use this effect of "Street Shark Streex" once per turn," not just "
You can only use this effect once per turn"[/*:m:1bh4n07w][/list:u:1bh4n07w]
Street Shark Feeding Frenzy's effect can be shortened from:
You can Ritual Summon this card with "Gene Slam". After this attacks a monster, all other ''Shark'' and ''Great White'' monsters you control can attack an additional time this turn. You can only activate this effect once per turn. Once per turn, when your opponent activates an effect; (Quick Effect) You can shuffle 1 ''Shark'' or ''Great White'' monster from your GY into your deck: Negate the activation. If a ''Shark'' or ''Great White'' monster, except this card, would be destroyed, you can instead half this card's ATK/DEF.to:
You can Ritual Summon this card with "Gene Slam". Your other monsters can make a second attack during each Battle Phase. Once per turn, when your opponent activates a card or effect that does not include a card destroying effect (Quick Effect): You can shuffle 1 "Shark" or "Great White" monster from your GY into the Deck; negate the activation. If another monster(s) on the field would be destroyed, you can make this card lose exactly 2000 ATK or DEF instead.[list:1bh4n07w][*:1bh4n07w]There's no need to make the effect that gives extra attacks "
activate"[/*:m:1bh4n07w]
[*:1bh4n07w]Not a good idea to halve ATK/DEF every time you wish to prevent destruction, as that makes the new ATK and DEF tedious to re-calculate because you have to keep re-calculating half of 2 separate values instead of just a reduction in 1[/*:m:1bh4n07w][/list:u:1bh4n07w]
Gene Slam's effect can be shortened from:
This card can be used to Ritual Summon any Fish or Aqua Ritual Monster. You must also Tribute monsters from your hand or field whose total Levels equal or exceed the Level of the Ritual Monster you Ritual Summon. You can banish this card and 1 ''Street Shark Feeding Frenzy'' from your GY: Special Summon 1 Fish Ritual monster from your hand/deck/GY, except, unless it is from the GY, ''Street Shark Feeding Frenzy'', ignoring the summoning conditions.to:
This card is used to Ritual Summon any WATER Fish Ritual Monster. You must also Tribute monsters from your hand or field whose total Levels equal or exceed the Level of the Ritual Monster you Ritual Summon. You can banish this card and 1 "Shark" or "Great White" monster from your GY; Special Summon 1 WATER Fish Ritual Monster from your hand/Deck/GY. (This is treated as a Ritual Summon.)This archetype neither has nor runs any Aqua rituals so unless you maybe have some separate archetype with such monsters that also uses this spell, you can remove the Aqua part. I also don't know why it can't just simply treat the special summon from the hand/deck/graveyard as a ritual summon
Shark Bite's effect should be shortened from:
If you control a ''Shark'' or ''Great White'' monster, target 1 card on the field: destroy it, then activate one of the following effects:
● Destroy all face-up Spell/Trap cards your opponent controls.
● Target 1 monster on the field: Destroy it.
● Banish the card you destroyed.to:
If you control a "Shark" or "Great White" monster: Target 1 card; destroy it, then banish it or destroy 1 additional card on the field.You don't
activate an effect while a current effect is still in the middle of resolving. You
apply such an additional effects. Also, when activating an effect that simply targets cards on the field for destruction, you don't actually need to specific that the target must be on the field. As an example,
Enishi, Shien's Chancellor simply says to target a face-up monster and destroy it without specifying that that target has to be on the field.
Sharkfight's effect should be nerfed from:
Special Summon 1 level 4 or lower ''Shark'' or ''Great White'' monster from your hand/deck/GY, and if you do, all Fish monsters you control gain 500 ATK until the end of this turn. This cannot be negated if your GY contains ''Gene Slam''. You can only activate 1 ''Sharkfight'' per turn.to:
If you have no cards in your Extra Deck: Special Summon 1 Level 4 "Shark" monster or 1 "Great White" from your hand/Deck/GY, and if you do, all Fish monsters you currently control gain 500 ATK until the end of this turn. You can only activate 1 "Sharkfight" per turn.since it's currently a possibly abusable 1-card rank 4 since you could summon
Buzzsaw Shark with this, activate that monster's effect to fetch another level 4 fish from the deck, and have access to rank 4s all without using your normal summon. It's like
Speedroid Terrortop all over again.
Also, the negate-proofing on this card isn't necessary since Street Shark Streex already has that covered.
Sharkbait's effect can be simplified from:
Target 1 ''Shark'' or ''Great White'' card, or 1 card those card text mentions ''Shark'' or ''Great White'', in your GY: Either add it to your hand, or apply the following effect based on it's card type:
● Monster: Special Summon it.
● Spell/Trap: Set it on your field, also you can activate it this turn.
Then, if you chose ''Street Shark Feeding Frenzy'' this way, you may target a second ''Shark'' or ''Great White'' card in your GY, except ''Street Shark Feeding Frenzy''. You can only activate 1 ''Sharkbait'' per turn.to:
Target 1 "Shark" or "Great White" card, and/or 1 card that has "Shark" or "Great White" in its text, in your GY, but if you target 2 cards this way, at least 1 of them must be "Street Shark Feeding Frenzy"; apply this effect on each target based on its card type, also after that, if this card targeted "Street Shark Feeding Frenzy" at activation, Set this card face-down instead of sending it to the GY.
● Monster: Add it to your hand or Special Summon it.
● Spell/Trap: Add it to your hand or Set it to your field. That Set card can be activated this turn if it is a Trap or Quick-Play Spell.
You can only activate 1 ''Sharkbait'' per turn.Recommend deleting Sharkstorm if or after implementing the above changes, since Street Shark Ripster and Street Shark Feeding Frenzy both cover negation making a third negate unnecessary.